Never.
No, not ever.
But.. twice is not enough,
And yet, once is more than plenty
With you.
With you
I gave my all.
Poured out my love for you
Then you stole my heart and left me
Shattered.
Shattered?
Like it’s my fault?
Remember, that was you
Who said yes to me, way back then.
Not me!
Not me.
I am broken.
And you are gone for good.
Yet I am lost in my own world.
Alone.
Alone.
Not me, but you.
Shattered on the inside,
With you there never will be love.
Never.
This is written as a Crown Cinquain for Yeah Writes March Poetry Slam
A Flash of Fiction... 
I like the way you re-used the last line of each stanza as the first of the next and the structuring of this as a conversation.
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Thanks, I actually had to go back and rewrite several of the stanzas to make it all fit and flow (still not sure I did though).
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I like the way you literally changed sides (nice use of the prompt 😉 ) as the speaker changed until the last one which seems to be said by both, the rest could fit into each other as if it were a puzzle and the parts were drifting apart until the last bit which doesn’t quite fit and makes it an odd shape… or am I overinterpreting?… -_-‘
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I wrote the last part as more an internal thought process, placing it in the middle to offset it from the speakers words. Instead of crossing back over, leaving them in a middle ground as something either could have thought.
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Oddly enough, I didn’t even notice the prompt aspect. This just happened to be something I have been working on since last week.
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It’s your instinct 😉
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Such a great way to think about the form. Never would have occurred to me and it works so well.
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Thanks. I was structuring it as a conversation, just happened to look up the word to check a few things and saw the crown definition (Wikipedia actually is helpful from time to time) and thought.. hrm..
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I like the conversation happening here. Conversation isn’t the right word. More like the conversation they should have with each other.
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True. True. These kind of conversations are pretty hard to have though.
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Yep, yep. I love what you’ve done with the form–the visuals and the repetition. I also love the strength of the voice in the third stanza.
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Thank you.
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The layout, the two voices with a final reflection, the repetition – all of it is so well thought-out and constructed. Just wonderful! And, as a side note, I love when a piece you’ve been working on for a while somehow fits with the prompts of the week you decide to post 🙂
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Thanks. And it was a nice surprise.
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Reblogged this on Thoughts from the Front and commented:
Yeah Write offered a challenge to write a cinquain… so, I did.
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