A Conversation in Cinquain…

Never.

No, not ever.

But.. twice is not enough,

And yet, once is more than plenty

With you.

With you

I gave my all.

Poured out my love for you

Then you stole my heart and left me

Shattered.

Shattered?

Like it’s my fault?

Remember, that was you

Who said yes to me, way back then.

Not me!

Not me.

I am broken.

And you are gone for good.

Yet I am lost in my own world.

Alone.

Alone.

Not me, but you.

Shattered on the inside,

With you there never will be love.

Never.

This is written as a Crown Cinquain for Yeah Writes March Poetry Slam

Published by

R. Todd

MFA from the Queens University of Charlotte ('21), BA in English from the University of Central Florida ('17), Group leader for the Florida Writers Association since 2019, member of AWP and ACES.

16 thoughts on “A Conversation in Cinquain…”

  1. I like the way you literally changed sides (nice use of the prompt 😉 ) as the speaker changed until the last one which seems to be said by both, the rest could fit into each other as if it were a puzzle and the parts were drifting apart until the last bit which doesn’t quite fit and makes it an odd shape… or am I overinterpreting?… -_-‘

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    1. I wrote the last part as more an internal thought process, placing it in the middle to offset it from the speakers words. Instead of crossing back over, leaving them in a middle ground as something either could have thought.

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    1. Thanks. I was structuring it as a conversation, just happened to look up the word to check a few things and saw the crown definition (Wikipedia actually is helpful from time to time) and thought.. hrm..

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  2. Yep, yep. I love what you’ve done with the form–the visuals and the repetition. I also love the strength of the voice in the third stanza.

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  3. The layout, the two voices with a final reflection, the repetition – all of it is so well thought-out and constructed. Just wonderful! And, as a side note, I love when a piece you’ve been working on for a while somehow fits with the prompts of the week you decide to post 🙂

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